I wrote this research paper for school about why players who used steroids in the 90s-2000s should be in the hof, it only took me 45 minutes so i’m worried I rushed it and I’d appreciate any feedback before submitting it
December 19, 2023
I wrote this research paper for school about why players who used steroids in the 90s-2000s should be in the hof, it only took me 45 minutes so i’m worried I rushed it and I’d appreciate any feedback before submitting it
3 comments
I’ll read it, but you’re wrong.
Oh boy, well. It’s not bad content wise. Lots of grammar issues.
I can’t really help with those on my phone while laying in bed without being able to edit the doc.
First sentence is a run on though and comma spliced. Try making it into a couple sentences.
My suggestion is to read it out loud to yourself. And fix whatever sounds weird.
Expand on the voting committee, who gets to vote? Why? Expand on the spitball, why were other things banned?
3 comments
I’ll read it, but you’re wrong.
Oh boy, well. It’s not bad content wise. Lots of grammar issues.
I can’t really help with those on my phone while laying in bed without being able to edit the doc.
First sentence is a run on though and comma spliced. Try making it into a couple sentences.
My suggestion is to read it out loud to yourself. And fix whatever sounds weird.
Expand on the voting committee, who gets to vote? Why? Expand on the spitball, why were other things banned?